Both Dee and Connie have sisters who are very different
than each is herself. Connie wants something very different for herself than her
mother, and Dee has left home and started a life very different from the one she had at
home.
I would expect the setting would be a place Dee might
likely visit: not a restaurant on the other side of the highway, as
Connie does. But as Connie is trying to leave what she sees as a boring, going-nowhere
existence behind, I could imagine her visiting a restaurant in a larger town, where Dee
would be more at home.
Remember that Dee is older, so their
conversation might be one where Connie looks for advice, and it could be about anything:
getting a job and finding an apartment, or both,
etc.
Remember, too, that the dialogue needs to reflect the
characteristics of each young woman. Connie has little regard for her mother's advice
and thinks she is "grown up enough" to handle herself; Dee has little regard for her
heritage--the people she comes from, redefining herself, and interested in appearances.
(In this way, I think both characters are somewhat shallow--perhaps it's that they are
both still very young.)
When you use dialogue, you start
with the open quotation mark; capitalize the first word of the sentence; place a comma
(not a period unless there is no
tag)--or question mark/exclamation
point at the end of a sentence that ends that person's speech and
then type the closed/end quotation mark; lastly add the
conversational tag or he said/she said phrase. For
example:
"I never
thought we'd get through that traffic jam!"
exclaimed Patrick's father. (A "tag" can vary, e.g., "he said" or
"she explained," etc.)
or
"I
think I'll have vanilla ice cream." (If this is in response to another character's
question, you don't need to necessarily identify the
speaker.)
Try to avoid using "she said" over and over
again, mix it up: "she said," "she pondered," "she explained," etc., but only as
appropriate.
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