I like the way you have clearly set yourself up for a
paper that can be clearly organized into three parts. On first reading of this thesis,
my criticism was that it was starting to sound like a run-on. I also had trouble with
the the idea of the "relationships between" each pair of words. It is almost too
generic. Finally, when setting up parallel ideas (imagination and truth; boundaries and
escape; conquest and defeat) you need to make sure that you are dealing with a
"like-pair." Simply put, try to describe the balance of two ideas that are both the
same part of speech (ie: both nouns, verbs, adjectives,
etc).
It sounds like what you are trying to say should go a
little something more like this:
Robert Frost's poem, "Birches," portrays the
delicate balance between imagination versus truth, boundaries
versus freedom, and conquest versus
defeat.
The italicized words
above are possibly still not perfect and could be tweaked, but it sounds to me like this
is more the paper you are trying to write.
Otherwise, great
start. It sounds like this has the potential to be a very strong essay if this is where
you are beginning.
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